Comments on: I need opinions and suggestions on my book idea?

By: Dara K

Dara K — Sun, 22 Nov 2009 00:30:53 +0000

I think this book sounds very interesting. If I saw it on a shelf I would certainly pick it up. I think it would be logical that Lexi might have minor brain trauma from her car accident. Perhaps you could have everyone think Anthony is a side effect from her accident? As far as the end incident, there could be any number of things from falling down the stairs (or being tripped by Carter) to suicide. Good luck writing your book. Stick with it!

By: jake

jake — Sun, 22 Nov 2009 00:30:53 +0000

This isn’t a book, it’s young adult fiction, don’t get them confused.

By: Randy Anderson Jr. R.I.P.

Randy Anderson Jr. R.I.P. — Sun, 22 Nov 2009 00:30:53 +0000

1- i really like so i guess if its really good
2-interesting
3-nope
4-i have several ideas i list them:

a-she made and mistake by getting pregnant and the guy that she had sex with doesnt know then she tells him when shes five months pregnant then after that he pulls out a machine gun to kill her

b-based on a true life experience:she’s driving and hits something and her car flips over and ends up in a river

c-shes gets on a plane and its shot down as a terroist as the pilot

d-walmart gets robbed and shes a cashier to be shot

e-she’s driving on a bridge and something happen and it ends up in a ocean

f-she’s swimming when suddenly something bites her and she drowns

5-i would say maybe at the end her and anthony could get married and maybe after that Carter comes back when they think he’s gone and the story is about to wrap up and end but he’s came back to marry Lexi’s sister and her sister falls for her but he’s not only to back to marry but to kill Lexi and her sister and Anthony and he succeedes killing only one

~~~Randy Anderson Jr. R.I.P.~~~
died 11-9-09 as a love of my life

By: Elvryndle

Elvryndle — Sun, 22 Nov 2009 00:30:53 +0000

1. He** yes!
2. Pacing, it’s all about the art of pacing. You build up tension, you build up tension, and things get more and more heated till the reader’s mind is actually making the words zip past at the pace of their mental picture, (trust me, I’ve read books like this, and mastered the writing technique within my own novels) and then you slowly start placing a little weight on the brakes, so the reader doesn’t feel so swept away by the story, but don’t slow it too much, no one likes a sluggish tale.
3. Not really
4. It doesn’t really have to be realistic, I mean you’ve got angels and such showing up all around the story…unless you mean what problem could she run into that requires saving…well if she was in a car accident, she’s probably injured to some extent. You could have some internal injury that goes by unnoticed, that later causes her to almost die.
5. Uh, hm….I’d have to say that I’d need to see some of it, you know as you get writing, then I could help, so drop me a line (My profile allows email) with the story as it comes along and I’ll look it over.

By: SakuraKitty

SakuraKitty — Sun, 22 Nov 2009 00:30:53 +0000

1. I would totally read it!!!
2. Keep it suspenseful. Make many plot twists, and don’t drag one scene out for too long, unless it’s the climax or some other exciting event.
3. Honestly, there’s nothing I don’t like about your idea.
4. Lexi could be swimming in a lake or the ocean with Carter and some friends and family, or just Carter. Then she would drown/almost drown, to set the scene for Anthony to swoop in and save the day.
5. I would love to read it. And that’s a great idea on how you’re going to begin the story.

All I have to say is, go for it!!!