I need opinions and suggestions on my book idea?
Ok here is the summary
Summary-
Lexi James meets Anthony Mason at her mum’s friends wedding. After dating for about a year they fall deeply in love. But then Lexi looses him in a car crash that they were both in. But when she wakes up in the hospital and asks about Anthony they say she was the only person car and no one has heard of an Anthony Mason and he is not even in thhe school records. Lexi is confused as she clearly remembers him. A week after the accident she starts having dreams about him. It is obvious that he is trying to warn her about something but she can”t understand him. When her brothers best friend tells her he remembers Anthony and has dreams about him they become close friends. Her family and friends are all worried about her as she kepts insisting there was someone called Anthony Mason. In the end she finds out that Anthony was an angel of death but when he met her and fell in love with her he was trying to stop her fate. But Lexi’s brothers friend was also an angel of death and he was getting close to Lexi so he could take her life when it was time. Anthony comes back as a human in the end and saves Lexi from Carter(her brothers best friend) and her fate.
Questions
1. Would you read it?
2.How do I make it so readers will want to keep turning the pages?
3. Is there anything you don’t like about it?
4. In the end when Anthony comes back human what can the incident be where he saves her because I can’t think of anything realistic that could happen?
5. Any other opinions or suggestions on the idea?
The book is going to be in Lexi’s poiny of view.
Anthony and Carter are drawn to Lexi because her fate is to die soon but Anthony tries to stop it.
And I think I’m going to start the book with the scene where Lexi wakes up in hospital asking about Anthony and then she’s going to have flashbacks of what she remembers of Anthony.
Thanks
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You say you want to start it with her waking up in hospital. As no one believes her make the reader feel like she might be loosing it or is she? that way it builds suspense. She has flashbacks at first a lot of the accident, pieces only, fresh in her memory explain it in detail multiple flashbacks so the reader is quit aware of what happened where and how, as the accident flashbacks fade flashbacks of happier times with him increases, she even as you say dreams of him and wakes up after it is all too vivid to be just dreams. Also put in a flashback of them making love heightens the feeling of intimacy.
Don’t make Carter a friend of anybody, no one knew anthony because he was an angel so no one should know Carter for the same reason. and her family is merely background, he is a dark stranger that comes out of no where that tells her casually that he did know Anthony and he plays on her emotions so they could become friends
Anthony is in a manner of speaking been taken of her case because he chose not fulfil his duty, he was on his way to but because of his love for her pulled out the last minute but not quick enough to avoid the crash. now he is not assigned to anyone else because of his current emotional instability, he is able to see what is going on, like through a different unseen transparent wall. his superior (very important don’t mention god it might offend some people) his superior warns him against further involvement. so he tries to warn her through her dreams which are not as they used to be like memories. his superior says something like ‘if you do this, you know what would happen, there would be no turning back.’ (suspense builds – what is it he must not do?)
Then show Anthony making the ultimate decision inner conflict – to clip his wings it is the only way he can get to her again (don’t let the reader know what it is just yet)
Climax: Again she is in the same car on the same route but this time it is with Carter he is driving because he said he wants to take her somewhere when the surroundings get all too familiar she asks something like ‘where are you taking me?’ he: ‘You’ll see.’ the car speeds up and as they reach the very bend/tunnel/whatever suddenly Anthony is between them in the car. he grabs her and together they fall from the car just in time before it crashes into the rocks beside the tunnel/cliffside and burst into flames. she is hurt but conscious, Anthony is not. she, hurt real bad, crawls closer to him and lies with her head on his chest slipping into unconsciousness
she wakes up in the hospital again, the same scene as you started with (brings it full circle)
she cries because she again now knows that no one would believe her and because she thinks he is dead. her family comes to visit and after some talk they ask who the other man in the car was?
she feels confused when her family leaves she gets up (she is well enough to be able to) and anxiously walks over to the room where the man is said to be.
and there lies Anthony, sleeping, she comes in looks at the drips and casts he was hurt badly. She strokes over his face and he opens his eyes she starts to cry and falls down on him holding him close and kisses him
only then do people realise that he has become human and this was what would happen when he intervened
I think this book sounds very interesting. If I saw it on a shelf I would certainly pick it up. I think it would be logical that Lexi might have minor brain trauma from her car accident. Perhaps you could have everyone think Anthony is a side effect from her accident? As far as the end incident, there could be any number of things from falling down the stairs (or being tripped by Carter) to suicide. Good luck writing your book. Stick with it!
This isn’t a book, it’s young adult fiction, don’t get them confused.
1- i really like so i guess if its really good
2-interesting
3-nope
4-i have several ideas i list them:
a-she made and mistake by getting pregnant and the guy that she had sex with doesnt know then she tells him when shes five months pregnant then after that he pulls out a machine gun to kill her
b-based on a true life experience:she’s driving and hits something and her car flips over and ends up in a river
c-shes gets on a plane and its shot down as a terroist as the pilot
d-walmart gets robbed and shes a cashier to be shot
e-she’s driving on a bridge and something happen and it ends up in a ocean
f-she’s swimming when suddenly something bites her and she drowns
5-i would say maybe at the end her and anthony could get married and maybe after that Carter comes back when they think he’s gone and the story is about to wrap up and end but he’s came back to marry Lexi’s sister and her sister falls for her but he’s not only to back to marry but to kill Lexi and her sister and Anthony and he succeedes killing only one
~~~Randy Anderson Jr. R.I.P.~~~
died 11-9-09 as a love of my life
1. He** yes!
2. Pacing, it’s all about the art of pacing. You build up tension, you build up tension, and things get more and more heated till the reader’s mind is actually making the words zip past at the pace of their mental picture, (trust me, I’ve read books like this, and mastered the writing technique within my own novels) and then you slowly start placing a little weight on the brakes, so the reader doesn’t feel so swept away by the story, but don’t slow it too much, no one likes a sluggish tale.
3. Not really
4. It doesn’t really have to be realistic, I mean you’ve got angels and such showing up all around the story…unless you mean what problem could she run into that requires saving…well if she was in a car accident, she’s probably injured to some extent. You could have some internal injury that goes by unnoticed, that later causes her to almost die.
5. Uh, hm….I’d have to say that I’d need to see some of it, you know as you get writing, then I could help, so drop me a line (My profile allows email) with the story as it comes along and I’ll look it over.
1. I would totally read it!!!
And that’s a great idea on how you’re going to begin the story.
2. Keep it suspenseful. Make many plot twists, and don’t drag one scene out for too long, unless it’s the climax or some other exciting event.
3. Honestly, there’s nothing I don’t like about your idea.
4. Lexi could be swimming in a lake or the ocean with Carter and some friends and family, or just Carter. Then she would drown/almost drown, to set the scene for Anthony to swoop in and save the day.
5. I would love to read it.
All I have to say is, go for it!!!
my advice is to not put the entire plotline of your book on the internet for anyone to steal.
This sounds amazing. I have no idea to any of your questions. But I hope you write this and I hope it gets published cause I would really like to read it.
Sounds to me as your extremely creative and have the idea of A page turner in itself,however its plot is somewhat similar to several others I"ve read or veiwed on the big screen most of all of which were extremely succesful.
My advice is take this and run with it however in A completely new style or point of veiw.Nothing more disapointing than predicting the next page before you get to it
Perhaps Anthony might be an Angel within all angels and especially close to perhaps your Guardian Angel whom in the angel buissness is in his highest regards even though they are subject to rule for the purpose of god And in the end although not seen as the supernatural way of doing things in A normal fashion they gain his respect for their ingineuity.
The other angel would be A great wonderment to your readers with your creativity of how this changes for the betterment or disenchantmant of the one that would have brought an end to the life of Lexi.
Good luck Hope it Hits shelves
someday soon
Charles D, Wiggins
Very good. You are a good writer. Keep on reading authors like Dostoevsky, Dickens, Mailer, Philip K Dick Tolsoy, Anne Rice, S E Hinton. Good luck with your writing.